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@Mr100dragon100
Just don’t make it overly long. And you’ll be fine. A nice sized conversation adds personality

alright, is just another thing is i want to avoid exposition that last way too long

@Mr100dragon100
I think the two should talk at least a few times even if just once. It could create fun interaction

@NotYourPony
well maybe the next should be the main guy getting to know the main woman so the readers can get to know her too, maybe i should think about it and leave it up to vote

ok so i am making a story about love and I’m starting the story at the moment after the main guy and girl integrated and the guy left the pub and his friends were playfully teasing him saying that the girl likes him, the guy was a bit shy but later on he decides to see her again.

how should the second page play out, i got the idea that he sees her again but what should happen, should they just talk, should i imply that they kept seeing each other at the same table to hang out, should they start going out, what should i do so the story won’t be rushed but makes the female character more then just a love interest

@Cosmas-the-Explorer
well i was thinking of writing a fanfic (but i would not see it as one due to not having anypony from the show but there are oc fanfics i think so eh whatever) but is in the description of a single artwork piece so i can take a break from comics for a bit

i don’t want to write on Fimfiction because I’m not a professional writer and i made a few mistakes before. hopefully, I’ve improved but since I’m writing a love story i don’t want any harsh comments if i did not do a good job especially again I’m not a professional so i write here and get feedback on ideas before writing them so i know I’m doing the love story and the interaction between the characters well and my ideas are ok or if i should change them

and i think what i wrote is enough since this is a continuation of the previous story

but i will change it to a story about love instead of romance

@Mr100dragon100
I am not an expert at fanfiction or especially marketing in fanfiction but I would not mind there beinf a sappy direction. People might see it as a stylistic choice.

I think it might be nice to have a quote.

Also don’t call your story a romance story that sounds a little dry. Maybe call it “a story about love”.

And you might want to describe about them then just the pub. Maybe give a conflict or some idea of what your story will be like like maybe an adventure.

edit: Side note: Will this story be a comic or fanfic. And if a fanfic have you ever considered writing on Fimfiction

i wrote this for an introductory hook and i want to know what you think of it, what should i add or take away and whether should i add a quote or not?

i want to avoid it being cheezy or anything that might make the reader go “ewww” due to how sappy it is so i need help so i know if I’m doing well or not

ya becuase i want or in this case a “will they, won’t they” type of thing since this is a romance, but I’m going to need a lot of help to avoid it being cheezy, maybe I’ll go for the “hook” term and see if i can find anything on how to write a good one, because is like a description or summary about what the story is about but leave the readers wondering if they are going to get together

@Mr100dragon100
I’m not sure if there are terms for it. I guess you could call them hooks or cliffhangers.

But it seems the key is to make them look fun to read for future readers. Build up excitement.

@Mr100dragon100
Don LaFontaine?

what do you call a description for a story that goes like

“in a world” or “will they get out of this alive? found out soon” for a book so i can make the reader invested

I know this isn’t supposed to be the post to ask for this, but I feel bad about opening a new thread for such a trivial reason. You see, I’m looking for an old fic that tickled my fancy several years ago: I only remember it being some kind of A Canterlot Wedding fix fic, and featured Twily suddenly turning into a major alicorn as seen on the last G4 episode out of sheer wrath and an episode featuring a quite exciting fight between a raging Twilight and one of the Mane 6 - or was it Cadence? - in a Canterlot disco.

Can anyone help?
Thanks in advance.

choose what title i should go for my love story

@Cosmas-the-Explorer
alright, maybe i can say derpy is official but you know what happened (i think the whole event is silly, but what can you do) so ya i should stick with derpy, besides it sounds nice think of it as a cute nickname i think

@Mr100dragon100
It seems she has no official name. She is referred to by different names for advertising but nothing official.
You can check this Fimfiction post I asked for more info.

I dont think she is ever called any name in the show except for where Rainbow said “Careful Derpy!” which was later replaced with Rainbow not calling Derpy any name.

Personally I think for clarity for other readers, you should just call her Derpy. But if you want to call her Muffins then fine but be sure to specify that Muffins is Derpy since some might not be aware.

@Cosmas-the-Explorer
ya but what about derpy’s name is it officially muffins or no?

@Mr100dragon100
I see. In that case so far so good.

@Cosmas-the-Explorer
alright, i was thinking that she already knows bit alright

@Mr100dragon100
Sounds good I like it. But maybe you can make Ms. Cake say hello back and ask if she was here for anything and Derpy would reply I came to help you. To make it feel more natural.

what do you think about this

this is set in sugar cube corner

@Background Pony #8146
good options i just need names so i can do a vote, so thanks

@Cosmas-the-Explorer
i was thinking they are regular muffins but they could be in cupcake holders that are festive and maybe this scenario is a good idea

let me see how it would go once i write it

@Mr100dragon100
She wants to do muffin surprise? Most expect just cakes from Ms Cake but for Hearths Warming Eve, she will give the folks of Ponyville a new treat.

And Derpy is the best help. Maybe Ms Cake and Derpy make a muffin with cakelike elements. And Derpy wishes to sell them. Meanwhile maybe Pinkie Pie is on a mission from the Tree of Harmony

@Mr100dragon100
From Broken to Mended / A Return to Love?